2(c) Jake was angry at Diane’s accusations.
My heart was beating so loud, it seemed as though it could be heard ten metres away from me. Just a second ago, I was beaming from ear to ear, but now, the smile on my face had turned upside down into a frown. My eyes were watery and my mind seemed to be in another world, looking at my face. Being accused for something I didn’t do was like having my heart being torn into a million shreds.
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2(e) She sat heart-broken on her bed.
Ice cold tears rolled down her cheeks from her beautiful, golden eyes. Her mouth was pulled into a pout, her nose was as red as an apple, looking at her face was enough to show me that she was morose. She placed both her hands on her chest, right on top of where our hearts are. Her fingers were clenched into a fist. It was clear. Her heart was broken. Her fists showed as though her heart had been crushed into pieces.
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2 comments:
Nice descriptions. You have a flair with words so keep it up and remember to use this in your compositions. I'm a little confused by the fists showing though ...
Thank you. The fists, what I meant was that her heart was broken, like how we place something in our hands, and just crush it, like that.
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